Ruvimbo+and+Uzair

uzair:  The Clash In the midst of all the commotion, the youngster strived with what little momentum he had. Nothing mattered to him now; all he wanted to do was escape. He had been dragged into this for too long. And his perseverance was deteriorating. Why had he let pier pressure overwhelm him? It seemed like a bad idea from the beginning. Now, it had pursued beyond the point of retreat.

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As a young boy who gave into temptation, drugs were never going to solve his financial problems. Making large amounts of money, too much for his age in fact, people started questioning where he was getting the money from because his appearance and attitude started to change. Some students decided to snoop around and see what exactly he was doing and to their surprise they saw the drug dealers on the side of Wall Street selling to open customers, and that is when he was spotted. People could not believe their eyes, and then Monday morning during class, the students went to his desk and said, “We know what you’re up to.” Immediately, he stood up and attacked the boy in front of him. The class cheering on in solemn motion he became more aggravated to kill him for wanting to sell him out. ======

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 John Hardman was an average fourteen-year-old in an average fourteen-year-old’s life. However, there was one thing that separated him from the normal social patterns of those amongst his age group. He was a drug dealer. Nevertheless, he still clung on to the morals which he had been brought up with. The main one, being also the cause of the dealing, was the undying love for his parents. He had vowed to do what ever it takes to provide for his family. Here, John stood in front of the whole class, with an immense rage strengthening within his body. ======

His heart beating so fast with frustration, his body as hard as a rock, his piecing eyes drill through his opponent in so much anger. He was extremely agitated by the outrage of such inhuman behavior. John being a drug dealer was a very dangerous because he was putting his own life at risk even though he wanted to help his financial grounds supporting his family. Afraid of being caught and sent to Jail he had to convince them to keep quiet, foolishly the group of students agreed, if only they were paid to remain mute from what they had seen. John is not to blame for his actions even though he made a very poor choice of occupation knowing the outcome and difficulties that could appear if he was caught. He came from a broken home of a father who was a drunk and abused the children, a mother who was not strong enough to leave in order to support her children. John’s mother worked three part time jobs so that she could put food on the table and pay the bills, while her drunken husband stayed at home drowning himself in alcohol.  uzair:

After his daytime drug transaction the following day, he had a complete exhaustion which he had to attend to immediately. He fell asleep on his bed only to be woken up only 20 minutes after drifting into his other realm. He, however, wasn’t woken to his mum calling him for dinner. A break of a window was the cause of his retreat to real life. Unknown to the havoc situation, he peered out the window, as to maybe catch a glance of the potential thief. What he saw shocked, and frightened him. A whole group of swat teams were lined up outside of his house. His mother was standing by the van labelled ‘human resources’. She was as pale as the early morning fog. Her eyes were watery. She was staring blankly at her house, as if terrified of it. A call from a swat member using the megaphone, “you have failed to pursue the orders given, Mr. John Hardman. We are now going to use force to retain you.” John was stumped in awe. There was nothing that seemed apparent for him to do.

Rue:

“Oh my goodness, what have I done?” John was so afraid it was difficult for him to even move, he was as numb as a statue. Not knowing how to react John immediately ran to the door trying to escape but it was too late, the SWAT team was surrounding the whole perimeter, so there was no way out. Standing in front of the door in such traumatic feeling the head chief of the SWAT team walked up to him and said “Young man, you are in a whole lot of trouble”. John’s first thought was “What do I say”, then to his surprise their family was under threat from some drug dealers who wanted to kill John but not knowing that the people who wanted to kill John and his family, were in actual fact the people he worked with on Wall Street. Apparently John’s addiction to selling drugs did not stop there, he stole some money and did not tell the rest of the dealers what the money was for, and the money he stole was used to pay the students threatening to spill the truth. So the SWAT team was there for a protection programmer, how they knew this was because a threat email was sent to their headquarters saying “If you are not careful, we are going to kill John Hardman and his family,” so it was important for them to be put in protective custody.

Message From Max: i like the story and the whole drug dealing and how it turns his life around but i still fail to understand the beginning of the story but this is probably because it isn't finished overall a really good story.

Message From Nawwaf: The story is very original and creative but I think that situations like these also happen too frequently in movies and therefore its pretty cliched.

Message form Rue and Uzi: Patronising, but thanks for the comments even though we do don't understand Nawwaf's comment because the second part of your comment contradicts the first.

Mr. Suresh: Thanks for the comments, Max and Nawwaf. Max, may I ask you, again, to use a word-processor to edit your entry first? Nawwaf, I am afraid I agree with the comments made by the writer on the contradiction. Rue and Uzair, I don't think their comments are patronising. Perhaps, you can explain how they are.